Dead Line - Screenwriting Test

Last December I started writing a 6 episode psychological horror called Dead Line, conceived for a contained vertical drama concept. The first episode was Caller Unknown.

For the past few weeks I have been coding my own writing software, and as well as prose, it also allows me to write screenplays. So to test it, I thought to convert Caller Unknown into a screenplay. I am mostly happy with it, but feel the first page is a little slow and dense.

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