Wow! It felt almost post apocalyptic in the beginning but the way you narrow the scope down to Harris’s internalizations and fears was so subtle and it really pulled me right into his shoes. Really well done.
Gary I find your writing extremely descriptive. The way I felt like I was in the story. The Void moving behind her, made me feel alert. But then when you said it started moving, I was anxious in my seat and couldn’t stop reading.
That opening view through the thermal scope pulled me straight into the void, clinical, hypnotic, and already doomed. Loved how you turned a soldier’s detachment into something almost spiritual in its collapse.
Wow! It felt almost post apocalyptic in the beginning but the way you narrow the scope down to Harris’s internalizations and fears was so subtle and it really pulled me right into his shoes. Really well done.
Thank you. The intent was post-apocalyptic. Almost like the aftermath of a zombie apocalypse without the zombies.
For a split second, I was scared this would be another eye situation. But it was a scary, borderline tear-jerker of a story. The void is fascinating!
Yeah, no eyes in this one.
Thank you Kelly.
I see we’re back in “Gary’s gonna ruin my day, but beautifully” territory. Stunning work, even if I’ll be emotionally unstable for a week.
That was slick. And the void is an amazing concept. I do love a tragedy.
Thank you very much for your kind comment.
Gary I find your writing extremely descriptive. The way I felt like I was in the story. The Void moving behind her, made me feel alert. But then when you said it started moving, I was anxious in my seat and couldn’t stop reading.
My hands “hitched” too 😭
Thank you very much, your comment is appreciated.
That opening view through the thermal scope pulled me straight into the void, clinical, hypnotic, and already doomed. Loved how you turned a soldier’s detachment into something almost spiritual in its collapse.
Thank you. And I appreciate the share.